What platform will the next generation of journalists use?
학생이 쓴 원문
Today, we have several types of platform such as SNS and Youtube etc.
In my opinion these platforms and journalists have a common point.
Their common point is a rapid pace and change.
So, I think the next generation of journalists will use SNS or Youtube which is easy to consume the snack culture.
강사 첨삭
1. Today, we have several types of platform such as SNS and Youtube etc.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Today, we have several types of news platform such as SNS , Youtube and more.
2. In my opinion these platforms and journalists have a common point.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I think these platforms and journalists have a common target.
3. Their common point is a rapid pace and change.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Their common target is a rapid pace and change.
4. So, I think the next generation of journalists will use SNS or Youtube which is easy to consume the snack culture.
>>So, I think the next generation of journalists will use SNS or Youtube which is easy to consume for the snack culture.
Very good idea.
- T. Melody ^^
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