What realistic changes would you make to your country's attitude towards education?
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I consider that we has a problem of attitude towards education.
>>I consider that we have an attitude problem towards education.
To be specific when I learned korea history rather than sharing the idea, I Put teacher`s opinions in my memory.
>>To be specific, when I learned Korean history from my teacher, rather than sharing his ideas, he put some information in my [이름]d that I can\'t forget.
so it make me impede various my way of thinking about the accident(history).
>>So it made me impede various thoughts about the incident(history).
I think , it cause some of problems for the students who have to decide to do something without anyone help.
>>I think , it caused some problems for the students who have to decide to do something without anyone\'s help.
in other words, Teacher control student`s thought uniformly.
>>In other words, teachers control student`s thought uniformly.
so They can`t accept others with different thoughts.
>>So they don\'t listen to others opinion.
It just is different but they tell others that you are false.
>>They just say that it is false.
second, execpt the univ we have not enough to express my opinion with cofidence for others.
>>Secondly, we can\'t express our opinion with confidence until we become a university student.
so, eventhougt some of students has a question, they can`t ask teacher and thier classmates.
>>So even though some students have a question, they can\'t ask their teacher nor their classmates.
thesedays, To express their opinion with confidence manner is important factor to get a job. so many job seeker are register for speech academy.
>>These days, expressing you opinion with confidence is an important factor to get a job, thus many job seekers are enrolling in a speech academy.
if they have a chance to tell others, they can`t spend money to academy.
>>If they have a chance, they will do so even if it is expensive.
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