What reforms would you like to see your country to pass in the near future? Why?
학생이 쓴 원문
Recently, there are two main issues related to the legal system, demestically. One thing is for setting up the Senior Civil Servant Corruption Unit and another is that our law is too weak to properly punish some criminals, like sex offenders, and drunken drivers. I can’t agree more that all of them have to be reformed, but I’d like to write about the first one. Because this is about eradicating the core of deeper problems in our society.
For a long time, we have been exerting to establish social justice. We even made the former president impeached when she had severely devastated this value. But, we still see many cases that treat improperly or are just vanished. These cases always have suspicion that prosecutors are highly involved in. There has been nothing to be able to investigate them by others since the beginning or the Republic of Korea. Many people say that they are the final bosses in Korea. Or, we spoil them to do everything. We could not move forward more without it.
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I know your homework is a little difficult today, but thank you still^^
Recently, there are two main issues related to the legal system, demestically.
>>>Recently, there are two main issues related to the legal system, domestically.
One thing is for setting up the Senior Civil Servant Corruption Unit and another is that our law is too weak to properly punish some criminals, like sex offenders, and drunken drivers.
>>>CORRECT!
I can’t agree more that all of them have to be reformed, but I’d like to write about the first one.
>>>CORRECT!
Because this is about eradicating the core of deeper problems in our society.
>>>CORRECT!
OR: Because this is to eradicate the core of deeper problems in our society.
For a long time, we have been exerting to establish social justice.
>>>CORRECT!
OR: For a long time, we have devoted ourselves to establishing social justice.
We even made the former president impeached when she had severely devastated this value.
>>>We even impeached former President Park when she severely destroyed this value.
But, we still see many cases that treat improperly or are just vanished.
>>>But, we still see many cases that are treated improperly or just vanished.
These cases always have suspicion that prosecutors are highly involved in.
>>>These cases always have a suspicion that prosecutors are highly involved in.
There has been nothing to be able to investigate them by others since the beginning or the Republic of Korea.
>>>CORRECT!
Many people say that they are the final bosses in Korea. Or, we spoil them to do everything.
>>>Many people say they are Korea\'s final boss or we spoil them to do everything.
We could not move forward more without it.
>>>CORRECT!
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