What relaxing thing do you want to try doing? Answer in a few sentences.
학생이 쓴 원문
I want to do a floral arrangement because it allows me to have a peace in my brain. Its actual effect is reducing depression and anxiety from designing flowers. I hope to have a chance to do it and get a healthy relaxation from it.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Judy!
You are absolutely right! Arranging flowers is so therapeutic. The only problem is when they start to wilt and dry, they are hard to dispose. Nevertheless, the act of creating balance and having your own touch according to how they want them to appear is an awesome feeling. Thus, thank you for all the correct sentences.
My only suggestion is to use the better idiom for \'peace of my brain\' into \'peace of mind\'. Excellent job!
See you soon!
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!
Or: I want to do a floral arrangement because it allows me to have a peace of mind.
Its actual effect is reducing depression and anxiety from designing flowers.
>> Correct!
I hope to have a chance to do it and get a healthy relaxation from it.
>> Correct!
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