What’s a body part that you wouldn’t mind losing?

2020-02-10 · 첨삭 강사 Avery

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Every body party has its own function. Tonsil, appendix and one side kidney are well know as the organ that doesn\'t cause human death. However, all organs have special function to maintain our body. So, I don\'t want to lose anything in my body. If I have to chose one thing, I would lose my appendix because I heard that there is no side effect and inconvenient after resection procedure. I have few friends who got surgery in order take their appendix from body because of appendicitis. The remarkable thing after surgery between past and present is the scar. All patients got a quite long scar because doctor had to cut patient\'s body and then put stitches in a wound. However, patients have small scar after surgery recently, because doctor just make small hole on patient body and use endoscopy to remove one\'s appendix. Medical science is making great progress we don\'t know what will happen in the future.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Mr. [이름]! How was your weekend? I hope you had a good time. Anyway, I appreciate your composition.

You can tell me more about it later. See you! ^^

~T.Avery

Every body party has its own function.

>> CORRECT

Tonsil, appendix and one side kidney are well know as the organ that doesn\'t cause human death.

>> Tonsil, appendix and one side of our kidney are well-known as the organs that doesn\'t cause human death even when removed.
However, all organs have special function to maintain our body.

>> However, all organs have special functions to maintain our body\'s well-being.

So, I don\'t want to lose anything in my body.

>> CORRECT
If I have to chose one thing, I would lose my appendix because I heard that there is no side effect and inconvenient after resection procedure.

>> If I have to chose one thing, I would lose my appendix because I heard that there is no side effect and it doesn\'t cause any inconvenience after the resection procedure.

I have few friends who got surgery in order take their appendix from body because of appendicitis.

>> I have a few friends who got surgery in order remove their appendix from their body because of appendicitis.

The remarkable thing after surgery between past and present is the scar.

>> CORRECT

All patients got a quite long scar because doctor had to cut patient\'s body and then put stitches in a wound.

>> All patients got quite a long scar because the doctor had to cut the patient\'s body and then put stitches in the wound.

However, patients have small scar after surgery recently, because doctor just make small hole on patient body and use endoscopy to remove one\'s appendix.

>> However, patients have small scars after surgery recently, because doctors just make a small hole on the patient\'s body and use endoscopy to remove one\'s appendix.

Medical science is making great progress we don\'t know what will happen in the future.

>> Medical science is making great progress so we don\'t know what will happen in the future.

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