What’s a body part that you wouldn’t mind losing?

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Every parts of my body are important.

>> Every part of my body is important.

OR>> All parts of my body are important.

But if I have to lose one of them, I\'ll give up having toes.

>> CORRECT
First, toes doesn\'t do that important tasks for me.

>> First, toes don\'t do much important tasks for me.

Toes help me to keep balance when I\'m walking.

>> CORRECT

But I think it\'s possible to walk without toes though it\'ll be a little bit difficult.

>> CORRECT

So I think it\'s better than losing the main parts of my body like eyes or legs.

>> CORRECT
Second, toes are the part which people doesn\'t care so much.

>> Second, toes are the body parts which people don\'t care so much about.

Some people discriminate disabled people because they look different to ordinary people though it\'s a wrong behavior.

>> CORRECT

But people can\'t know whether I have toes if I don\'t put off socks. So I don\'t mind losing toes.

>>However, people can\'t know whether I have toes if I put on socks so I don\'t mind losing my toes.
The lesson which I got while I am writing this essay is that I have to be grateful because I have a normal body. And having disabilities are not disabled people\'s fault, so you must not tease or discriminate them.

>> The lesson which I got while I was writing this essay is that I have to be grateful because I have a normal body, and that having disabilities is not the disabled people\'s fault, so you must not tease or discriminate them.