What's the best way to stamp out discrimination? What's the worst example of discrimination you've w

2017-05-17 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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I think the best way is to get rid of prejudice. There are two reasons to support my opinion. The first reason is bebeficial. If we have pregudice constantly, our society would be simple since it is created by a person or a group. The second reason is that removing prejudice helps us widen perspectives. By removing it, we can have a chance to get different opinions and perspectives with other. As a result, I think get rid of prejudice is the best way to stamp out discrimination.

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Hi there, [이름]!

Thank you for your homework. Stay focused on your goal! You can do it! See you tomorrow.^^

~Kelly^^ 

I think the best way is to get rid of prejudice. There are two reasons to support my opinion.

>> Correct.
The first reason is bebeficial.

>> The first reason is beneficial.

If we have pregudice constantly, our society would be simple since it is created by a person or a group.

>> If there is no prejudice, our society will be simple since it is composed of persons or group of people.
The second reason is that removing prejudice helps us widen perspectives.

>> The second reason is that removing prejudice helps us widen our perspectives.

By removing it, we can have a chance to get different opinions and perspectives with other.

>> By eradicating it, we can have a chance to get different opinions and perspectives from others.
As a result, I think get rid of prejudice is the best way to stamp out discrimination.

>> Correct.

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