What’s the best way to stamp out racism?

2015-02-26 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

학생이 쓴 원문

We know that all people are equal and that we have to treat all people equally. But in reality, many kinds of discrimination exist in the world based on religion, sex, age, etc. Racism is one of the various discriminations. Even though I don't have experienced racism directly, I have hear about it from the news or other people. Especially, since I am [Name], I have usually heard about the discrimination aginst Mongoloid in America and other country where the White lives. Sometimes I have heard the terrible story of discrimination such as the white killed or attacked the Mongoloid. The society has grown up and people have been bountiful, but discrimination based on race still exist now. Actually, I think that there is no best way to stamp out racism but proper education is good way to change people's mindset toward race. If people over the world are taught and try to treat all people equally, racism will be stamped out someday. It's definitely difficult, but we should try to do.

강사 첨삭

Hello Miss [이름]! Thank you again for this great homework. I can always see the effort in every essay that you write. Good job! ^^ ~Kelly^^ We know that all people are equal and that we have to treat all people equally. >> We know that all people are equal and that we have to treat everybody equally. But in reality, many kinds of discrimination exist in the world based on religion, sex, age, etc. >> CorrectRacism is one of the various discriminations. >> Racism is one form of discrimination. Even though I don\'t have experienced racism directly, I have hear about it from the news or other people. >> Even though I have not experienced racism, I have heard about it from the news or from other people. Especially, since I am [Name], I have usually heard about the discrimination aginst Mongoloid in America and other country where the White lives. >> Especially, since I am [Name], I have usually heard about the discrimination against Mongoloids in America and other countries where the white people live. Sometimes I have heard the terrible story of discrimination such as the white killed or attacked the Mongoloid. >> There were times when I have heard terrible stories of discrimination such as a white killed or attacked a Mongoloid. The society has grown up and people have been bountiful, but discrimination based on race still exist now. >> The society has grown up and people have been bountiful, but discrimination based on race still exists now. Actually, I think that there is no best way to stamp out racism but proper education is good way to change people\'s mindset toward race. >> Actually, I think that there is no best way to stamp out racism but through proper education so people\'s perception towards race would change.  If people over the world are taught and try to treat all people equally, racism will be stamped out someday. >> If people over the world get proper education and try to treat all people equally, racism will be stamped out someday. It\'s definitely difficult, but we should try to do. >> It\'s definitely difficult, but we should try it.

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