What\'s the biggest change you\'ve made in your life? Was it good / bad?
학생이 쓴 원문
What I went to the Philippines is the biggest change in my life.
Before I went to there, I was studied to improve toeic score.
No matter how hard I studied, I couldn\'t get over 700 points. Because my major was trading, I must get the English score for finding a job.
So I got a lots of stress to get the high score in toeic.
I thought I have to go the abroad for learning English. That time I was so tired of taking toeic class at the academy in Korea and finding a job.
Then, I went to the Philippines and I think I tried really hard to learning English. I was checked by writing English diary every day and studied grammar hard. What\'s a little disappointing is that I studied less because of my Korean friends.
But I think I have improved a lot In English and became a more independent person.
Going to the Philippines was my first overseas trip. For the first time here, I got the courage to travel to many countries.
That\'s why going to the Philippines is my biggest chage in my life.
강사 첨삭
Hello Kate!
Your composition was so nice to read! I wish we could\'ve met while you were in the Philippines. I hope you enjoyed the stay here. If you decide to visit again, let me know. I\'ll be your tour guide and I will treat you to many traditional Filipino food. See you later! ^^
~~Teacher Kate
>>>The biggest change in my life is when I went to the Philippines.
Before I went to there, I was studied to improve toeic score.
Before I went to there, I was studied to improve toeic score.
>>>Before I went there, I studied to improve my Toeic score.
No matter how hard I studied, I couldn\'t get over 700 points.
No matter how hard I studied, I couldn\'t get over 700 points.
>>>CORRECT!
Because my major was trading, I must get the English score for finding a job.
>>>CORRECT!
So I got a lots of stress to get the high score in toeic.
So I got a lots of stress to get the high score in toeic.
>>>So, I got lots of stress to get a high score in Toeic.
I thought I have to go the abroad for learning English.
I thought I have to go the abroad for learning English.
>>I thought I have to go abroad to learn English.
That time I was so tired of taking toeic class at the academy in Korea and finding a job.
>>>That time, I was so tired of taking Toeic classes in a Korean academy and looking for a job.
Then, I went to the Philippines and I think I tried really hard to learning English.
Then, I went to the Philippines and I think I tried really hard to learning English.
>>>Then, I went to the Philippines and I think I tried really hard to learn English.
I was checked by writing English diary every day and studied grammar hard.
>>>I wrote on my English diary every day and I studied grammar hard.
What\'s a little disappointing is that I studied less because of my Korean friends.
>>>CORRECT!
But I think I have improved a lot In English and became a more independent person.
>>>CORRECT!
Going to the Philippines was my first overseas trip.
Going to the Philippines was my first overseas trip.
>>>CORRECT!
For the first time here, I got the courage to travel to many countries.
>>>CORRECT!
That\'s why going to the Philippines is my biggest change in my life.
That\'s why going to the Philippines is my biggest change in my life.
>>CORRECT!
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