What’s the most memorable family gathering you’ve attended?
학생이 쓴 원문
My father came to my house last year on January before he went away with my siblings came too.
we ate delicious food all together and sang a song.
A few month ago I saw the vidio , my dad song along with beat.
That was last time when we saw him in my father was health.
Sometimes I think and miss my parents
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ju Mi! You must\'ve missed your parents very much. It\'s good to reminisce memorable moments with our family from time to time.^^ Thank you for sharing this memory. See you in class!
~T. Jewel
My father came to my house last year on January before he went away with my siblings came too.
>>My father came to my house with my siblings last year before he passed away.
we ate delicious food all together and sang a song.
>>We ate delicious food together and sang songs.
A few month ago I saw the vidio , my dad song along with beat.
>>A few months ago, I saw the video where my dad sang along with the beat.
That was last time when we saw him in my father was health.
>>That was the last time we saw our father healthy.
OR
>>That was the last time we saw our father in good health.
Sometimes I think and miss my parents
>>Sometimes, I think about my parents and miss them.
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