What’s the most memorable vacation you’ve had?
학생이 쓴 원문
Traveling to Vietnam is the most memorable vacation for me.
And It is reason why I liked to travel to Vietnam.
First, I could relaxed.
I always busy to work in part time job in cafe and prepare English test for applying for the internship before I go to the travel. So, I could be stable and enjoy without any burden in Vietnam.
Second, It has many kind of activities.
I really like to experience various activities related to the country I travel to. For example, Wearing traditional clothes and eating famous food. So, I bought ‘ao dai’ that is vietnam’s traditional clothes and took them on while I was traveling. And I also made vietnam’s traditional foods in person. Therefore, I could learn more diversity culture and understood that through this experiences.
Finally, I liked to see sundown.
I though Vietnam have beautiful beaches. I and my friends walked along the beach for a long time and took so many photos. Sometimes when I looked the photos, I’m very happy and joyful.
So, I had a blas
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름] [이름]! I am glad to know that you had a great time in Vietnam. I hope you\'ll be able to travel more in the future. You were able to share your experiences using a lot of sentences. I commend you for that. Please take care, and see you!
--Teacher Anji
Traveling to Vietnam is the most memorable vacation for me.
>> CORRECT
And It is reason why I liked to travel to Vietnam.
And It is reason why I liked to travel to Vietnam.
>> These are the reasons I liked travelling to Vietnam.
First, I could relaxed.
First, I could relaxed.
>> First, I could relax.
I always busy to work in part time job in cafe and prepare English test for applying for the internship before I go to the travel.
I always busy to work in part time job in cafe and prepare English test for applying for the internship before I go to the travel.
>> I\'m always busy working at my part time job in a cafe, and preparing for English test for my application for internship before I went on a trip.
So, I could enjoy Vietnam without any stress.
>> CORRECT
Second, It has many kind of activities.
Second, It has many kind of activities.
>> Second, there are many kinds of activities.
I really like to experience various activities related to the country I travel to.
I really like to experience various activities related to the country I travel to.
>> CORRECT
For example, Wearing traditional clothes and eating famous food.
>> For example, wearing traditional clothes and eating famous food.
So, I bought ‘ao dai’ that is vietnam’s traditional clothes and took them on while I was traveling.
>> So, I bought an Ao Dai\" Vietnam\'s traditional clothes, and took them on while I was traveling.
And I also made vietnam’s traditional foods in person.
>> I also made Vietnamese traditional food myself.
Therefore, I could learn more diversity culture and understood that through this experiences.
>>Therefor, I could learn more about diverse culture and understood them through these experiences.
Finally, I liked to see sundown.
Finally, I liked to see sundown.
>> Finally, I liked seeing the sundown/sunset.
I though Vietnam have beautiful beaches.
I though Vietnam have beautiful beaches.
>> I thought Vietnam had beautiful beaches.
I and my friends walked along the beach for a long time and took so many photos.
>> I and my friends walked along the beach for a long time, and took so many photos.
Sometimes when I looked the photos, I’m very happy and joyful.
>> Sometimes, when I looked at the photos, I\'m very happy and joyful.
So, I had a blas.
So, I had a blas.
>> So, I had a blast!
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