What\'s the most memorable winter vacation you have had?
학생이 쓴 원문
What\'s the most memorable winter vacation you have had?
When I was young, I lived in rural area as you know.
Threre are many jars of source in front of my house.
Also The snow stocked on their covers.
I remember that It was heavy snowy day.
When I woke up in the morning, I could see the snow feild without footprint.
I think that it is advantage for living rural.
It was clear and sparking to come in my eyes.
So my brother and I could step on there as first man.
It was amazing experience and I still remember the pretty scenery.
HI, jewel.
I always remember my childhood as the homework.
So I was happy during doing homework.
Thank you so much.
Have a nice day.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Stella! I\'m happy you get to reminisce about things and memories from your childhood. ^^ Thank you for sharing this lovely story! See you in class again!
~T. Jewel
When I was young, I lived in rural area as you know.
>>When I was young, I lived in a rural area, as you know.
Threre are many jars of source in front of my house.
Threre are many jars of source in front of my house.
>>There are many jars of sauce in front of my house.
Also The snow stocked on their covers.
Also The snow stocked on their covers.
>>Also, the snow stacked on their covers.
I remember that It was heavy snowy day.
I remember that It was heavy snowy day.
>>I remember that it was a very snowy day.
When I woke up in the morning, I could see the snow feild without footprint.
When I woke up in the morning, I could see the snow feild without footprint.
>>When I woke up in the morning, I could see the snow field without footprints.
I think that it is advantage for living rural.
I think that it is advantage for living rural.
>>I think that it is an advantage to live in a rural area.
It was clear and sparking to come in my eyes.
It was clear and sparking to come in my eyes.
>>It was clear and sparkling as it came into my eyes.
So my brother and I could step on there as first man.
So my brother and I could step on there as first man.
>>So my brother and I could step on there as the first ones.
It was amazing experience and I still remember the pretty scenery.
It was amazing experience and I still remember the pretty scenery.
>>It was an amazing experience, and I still remember the pretty scenery.
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