What's the percentage of blind people before and nowadays in Korea?(ANSWER)

2018-11-30 · 첨삭 강사 Alexia

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According to Internet, the number of people who are blind in Korea is 250,000. And, the total population of our country is 50 million. The percentage of blind people in Korea is 0.5%.(Nowadays) (Sorry, I can't found the blind people's percentage at before..) As I searched like this, I feel that the number of people who are blind in our country is a lot of than I thought. -END-

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름],

 

 Thank you for doing your homework. ^^

 

HOMEWORK:

 

What\'s the percentage of blind people before and nowadays in Korea?

Please answer in complete sentences.

 

YOUR ANSWER:

 

According to Internet, the number of people who are blind in Korea is 250,000. And, the total population of our country is 50 million.
The percentage of blind people in Korea is 0.5%.(Nowadays)
(Sorry, I can\'t found the blind people\'s percentage at before..)
As I searched like this, I feel that the number of people who are blind in our country is a lot of than I thought.

             

  

CORRECTIONS:

 

According to Internet, the number of people who are blind in Korea is 250,000. And, the total population of our country is 50 million.
The percentage of blind people in Korea is 0.5%.(Nowadays)
(Sorry, I can\'t
find the blind people\'s percentage before.)
With what I have researched, I feel that the number of people who are blind in our country is a lot than I thought.
          

 

 

** Dear [이름], thank you once again for making time to share your thoughts in the homework. J  Please take note of the corrections.

 Cheers!! Take care. J

 

  ---------T. Alexia----------    

                       

           

                         

                         

           

             

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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