What\'s the scariest thing about oceans?
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Of course, animals that I feel are the scariest about an ocean such as the shark, jellyfish, and puffer fish. The reason why I don\'t know when they come to me. Also, some animals have a poison, it\'s dangerous for my life. When I lived in Korea, I\'ve never seen the shark. They don\'t come around the sea. However, sometimes I heard about news that they came to there after global warming. [이름]ce the water temperature went up. On the other hand, I saw the jellyfish easily when I traveled to an ocean. Last of all, the puffer fish tastes good even if it has a poison. :)
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Hi, Eric!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
Of course, animals that I feel are the scariest about an ocean such as the shark, jellyfish, and puffer fish.
>> Of course, the scariest thing about the ocean are the animals such as the sharks, jellyfishes, and puffer fishes.
The reason why I don\'t know when they come to me.
>> The reason is that I don\'t know when will they come to me.
Also, some animals have a poison, it\'s dangerous for my life.
>> CORRECT!
When I lived in Korea, I\'ve never seen the shark.
>> When I was living in Korea, I\'ve never seen a shark.
They don\'t come around the sea.
>> CORRECT!
However, sometimes I heard about news that they came to there after global warming. [이름]ce the water temperature went up.
>> However, sometimes I hear some news about them coming to the area after the global warming [이름]ce the water temperature went up.
On the other hand, I saw the jellyfish easily when I traveled to an ocean.
>> On the other hand, I see a jellyfish easily when I travel to the ocean.
Last of all, the puffer fish tastes good even if it has a poison. :)
>> Lastly, the puffer fish tastes good even if it has a poison. :)
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