What’s the toughest decision you ever made?

2019-12-13 · 첨삭 강사 Avery

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The toughtest decision I made was changing my business category completely. I was a office worker in public agency, but now I am woking at oriental medical clinic. An office clerk didn\'t fit me, and I wanted to find something more active. Consequently, I enjoy new work and I think it is suited for my personality.

강사 첨삭

Hello there, [이름]ra! Thanks for sending in your composition.

I\'m glad that you\'ve found a job you enjoy. Let\'s talk about it more in class. See you! ^_^

~T.Avery

The toughtest decision I made was changing my business category completely.

>> The toughest decision I made was changing my business category completely.

I was a office worker in public agency, but now I am woking at oriental medical clinic.

>> I was an office worker in a public agency, but now I am working at an oriental medical clinic.

An office clerk didn\'t fit me, and I wanted to find something more active.

>> Being an office clerk didn\'t fit me, and I wanted to find something more active.

OR>> Being an office clerk didn\'t fit me, so I wanted to find a more engaging job.

Consequently, I enjoy new work and I think it is suited for my personality.

>> Consequently, I enjoy my new work and I think it suits my personality.

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