What\'s the worst experience you\'ve had in your hometown?

2023-06-02 · 첨삭 강사 Caitlyn

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I don\'t remember exactly how old I was, but it was someday when I visited my fourth aunt\'s house. After we had a great time, my family and I prepared to go home. Before my parents and my sister came out, I went to the elevator first. But no matter how long I waited for the elevator to arrive and my family to come out, they didn\'t. So I decided to use stairs to go down to the first floor. But it was 19th floor. I stepped down again and again but it never ended. I was so nervous because I didn\'t know what should I do. I cannot go upward, and even don\'t know how to go out to take the elevator in the middle. I don\'t know how could I rescued but it\'s still vivid when I met my father. I cried only then when I was hugged by my father. The emotion that I felt at that time might be the maximum of the fear. Actually I wet my pants a little. Now that I think about it, I wonder how scared the child must have been. This story is still talke about occasionally among my family.

강사 첨삭

Happy Friday, Ko [이름].
I can\'t imagine what you\'ve been through during the time you visited your Aunt. It must be a terrifying experience for you but at least your dad was able to find you.
-T. Caitlyn
I don\'t remember exactly how old I was, but it was someday when I visited my fourth aunt\'s house. 
>> CORRECT
After we had a great time, my family and I prepared to go home. 
>> CORRECT
Before my parents and my sister came out, I went to the elevator first. 
>> CORRECT
But no matter how long I waited for the elevator to arrive and my family to come out, they didn\'t. 
>> CORRECT
So I decided to use stairs to go down to the first floor. 
>> CORRECT
But it was 19th floor. 
>> But my aunt\'s apartment is on the 19th floor.
I stepped down again and again but it never ended. 
>> I kept on walking down the stairs but it never ended.
I was so nervous because I didn\'t know what should I do. 
>> I was so nervous because I didn\'t know what to do.
I cannot go upward, and even don\'t know how to go out to take the elevator in the middle. 
>> I can\'t go up again and don\'t even know how to go out and find the elevator.
I don\'t know how could I rescued but it\'s still vivid when I met my father. 
>> I don\'t know how I was rescued but it\'s still vivid when I met my father.
I cried only then when I was hugged by my father. 
>> I cried when I was hugged by my father.
The emotion that I felt at that time might be the maximum of the fear. 
>> The emotion that I felt at that time might be maximum fear. 
Actually I wet my pants a little. 
>> Actually, I wet my pants a little.
Now that I think about it, I wonder how scared the child must have been. 
>> Now that I think about it, I wonder how scared I must have been. 
This story is still talke about occasionally among my family.
>> This story is still talked about occasionally among my family.

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