What’s your favorite spring memory?

2015-03-11 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

학생이 쓴 원문

My memory is full of enjoyable events with my family, friends and a boyfriend. Actually, there are so many memory in my life that I cannot choose just one thing. Nevertheless, if I have to select one events in order to write this essay, I will choose the memory of cherry blossom festival with my boyfriend. In Korea, there are some famous festival related to cherry blossom. In Seoul, the Spring Flower festival is held between at the end of April and at the beginning of May in Yeouido every year. There are lots of trees of cherry blossom along the street so it seems that fink snow is falling when the floral leaf are floating about in the wind. Especially, at night, diverse color is reflected in the flower leaves and it is also very marvelous. I went to the festival with my boyfriend two year ago for the first time. Despite of many people, I did not think that it is not confusing but romantic. For they were couples. As spring comes around, I want to go there again with my boyfriend.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Miss [이름]! That was indeed a very unforgettable memory. I hope that you can create more memories with your boyfriend. Enjoy the spring season!^^ ~Kelly^^ My memory is full of enjoyable events with my family, friends and a boyfriend. >> My memory is full of enjoyable events with my family, friends and boyfriend. Actually, there are so many memory in my life that I cannot choose just one thing. >> Actually, there are so many memories in my life that I cannot choose just one thing. Nevertheless, if I have to select one events in order to write this essay, I will choose the memory of cherry blossom festival with my boyfriend. >> Nevertheless, if I have to select one event for this essay, I will choose memory of the Cherry Blossom festival with my boyfriend.In Korea, there are some famous festival related to cherry blossom. >> In Korea, there are some famous Cherry Blossom festivals. In Seoul, the Spring Flower festival is held between at the end of April and at the beginning of May in Yeouido every year. >> Every year, the Spring Flower festival in Yeouido, Seoul is held between the end of April and beginning of May. There are lots of trees of cherry blossom along the street so it seems that fink snow is falling when the floral leaf are floating about in the wind. >> There are lots of Cherry Blossom trees along the street so the leaves that are floating in the air look like pink snow. Especially, at night, diverse color is reflected in the flower leaves and it is also very marvelous. >> Especially at night, diverse colors are reflected by the plant leaves and it looks marvelous.I went to the festival with my boyfriend two year ago for the first time. >> Two years ago, my boyfriend and I joined the festival for the first time. Despite of many people, I did not think that it is not confusing but romantic. >> Despite the crowd, I found it very romantic. For they were couples. >> Correct. As spring comes around, I want to go there again with my boyfriend. >> Correct.

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