What\'s your favorite thing about going on vacation?

2020-05-01 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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During my precious time in vacation, I usually spend my time on enjoying my hobbies. First, I do like playing golf a lot. Even though I am not a good golfer, I like to play. so I often play games with my friends in screen golf courses. Second, I do travel places. They don\'t need to be famous tourism places. as long as I can reach out easliy, I visit with my folks and enjoy barbecues and do some outdoor activities with my family.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!
I hope the alternative expressions could help.
Try to familiarize yourself with them.
I look forward to you using them in class.
Keep working hard.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
During my precious time in vacation, I usually spend my time on enjoying my hobbies.
>> Correct
First, I do like playing golf a lot. 
>> Correct
Even though I am not a good golfer, I like to play.
>> Correct
OR>> Even though I am not a good golfer, I still like to play.
so I often play games with my friends in screen golf courses.
>> That\'s why I often play games with my friends in screen golf courses.
Second, I do travel places. 
>> Second, I do travel to different places. 
They don\'t need to be famous tourism places. 
>> Correct
OR>> They don\'t need to be famous tourist spots.
as long as I can reach out easliy,
>> It\'s good as long as they are easy to reach.
I visit with my folks and enjoy barbecues and do some outdoor activities with my family.
>> I visit my folks and enjoy barbecues and do some outdoor activities with my family.

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