What\'s your most valued possession?

2021-05-24 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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What\'s your most valued possession? Actually, I don\'t have the most value possession. In the past time, I used to have some luxury bag and oi treased it so much. Now, i didn\'t bring it and the luxury bags are in the closet. I don\'t want to obsess somthing, I live a free life.

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Hi [이름]! Having valued possessions generates lots of positive feelings which make you feel good and enhance your mood, and even inspire or motivate you. It also give you sense of control; as you have ownership over precious possessions and this sense of control make you feel secure.

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Actually, I don\'t have the most value possession.
>> Actually, I don\'t have any valued possession.

In the past time, I used to have some luxury bag and oi treased it so much.
>> In the past, I used to have lots of luxury bags and I get teased by it a lot. 

Now, i didn\'t bring it and the luxury bags are in the closet.
>> Now, I don\'t use them and they are placed in the closet. 

I don\'t want to obsess somthing, I live a free life.
>> I don\'t want to obsess on something. I am living a free life. 

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