What\'s your opinion on countries with nuclear weapons and those who want weapons?
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I think nuclear weapons should be banned in every country.
Some countries think that having nuclear weapons is the tool of showing their power.
However, If they have nuclear weapons, it can cause a very cruel future.
Nuclear weapons are very dangerous things to wipe out the world.
If some people use the weapons by mistake, it will bring hideous results.
It can cause another World War.
I hope to live peacefully without any war.
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Hi there.
Here are my corrections, Chloe.
I think nuclear weapons should be banned in every country.
>>Correct!
Some countries think that having nuclear weapons is the tool of showing their power.
>>Correct!
However, If they have nuclear weapons, it can cause a very cruel future.
>>However, if they have nuclear weapons, it can cause a very cruel future.
Nuclear weapons are very dangerous things to wipe out the world. If some people use the weapons by mistake, it will bring hideous results.
>>Correct!
It can cause another World War. I hope to live peacefully without any war.
>>Correct!
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