What\'s your opinion on minors having jobs or earning money?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think the opinion on minors having jobs or earning money is not because kids is study and play.
But gift of present is okay.
강사 첨삭
Here\'s your corrected composition, Jimmy. Please take a look at the corrections below. Have a good night there!
Cheers,
Jean~~
What\'s your opinion on minors having jobs or earning money?
I think the opinion on minors having jobs or earning money is not because kids is study and play. But gift of present is okay.
>>> I think minors having jobs or earning money is not just about kids needing to study and play. But receiving gifts is okay.
>>> OR: I think the debate on minors having jobs or earning money isn\'t just about kids needing to study and play. However, receiving gifts is acceptable.
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