What\'s your standpoint on this, \"Facebook should be banned\"?
학생이 쓴 원문
many people said Facebook is wasting your life. but I don\'t agree with that. I think Facebook makes my time useful.
I can get in touch with my friends who are hard to meet and get fresh news about them easily.
in addition, many people share their experiences and feeling. so I can get information in the feed when I find a good restaurant and cafe. it reduces the choosing time and increases my satisfaction.
강사 첨삭
Great point!
Good job on this one, [이름]!
I definitely agree because facebook is where I get recommendations as well.
~Teacher Eve.
many people said Facebook is wasting your life.
>> Many people said that Facebook is wasting your life.
but I don\'t agree with that.
>> But I don\'t agree with that.
I think Facebook makes my time useful.
>> Correct!
I can get in touch with my friends who are hard to meet and get fresh news about them easily.
>> Correct!
in addition, many people share their experiences and feeling.
>> In addition, that\'s where many people share their experiences and feelings.
so I can get information in the feed when I find a good restaurant and café.
>> So I can get information on the feed when I find a good restaurant and café.
it reduces the choosing time and increases my satisfaction.
>> It reduces my selection time and increases my satisfaction.
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