What\'s your take on mandatory military service? Should it be made optional, with benefits or compen
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In my opinion, military service should be mandatory in some countries which put national security first. But, the government also should give people who volunteer for the military service enough rewards. For example, enough military leave or helping landing a job after the discharge of the army could be good benefits. I don\'t think that military service has definitely negative impacts on people. That is because people are likely to experience valuable things in the military. For instance, they can learn how to live through a strict organization and build independence by themselves. In conclusion, I think that in some countries, military service has to be mandatory on the condition that the government has to ensure safety and give volunteers certain rewards.
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>>> OR: In my opinion, mandatory military service should be mandatory in countries who put national security as top priority.
But, the government also should give people who volunteer for the military service enough rewards.
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>>> OR: But, the government should also give people who volunteer for the military service enough compensation.
For example, enough military leave or helping landing a job after the discharge of the army could be good benefits.
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I don\'t think that military service has definitely negative impacts on people.
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>>> OR: I don\'t think that the military service has only negative effects on people.
That is because people are likely to experience valuable things in the military.
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For instance, they can learn how to live through a strict organization and build independence by themselves.
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In conclusion, I think that in some countries, military service has to be mandatory on the condition that the government has to ensure safety and give volunteers certain rewards.
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