What\'s your thought on vending machines in elementary schools?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think it\'s good because when students thirsty they can buy a drink and water. students can drink it when they don\'t have water.
And Teachers can drink a coffee.
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What\'s your thought on vending machines in elementary schools?
I think it\'s good because when students thirsty they can buy a drink and water.
>> I think it\'s good because students can buy a drink and water when they are thirsty.
students can drink it when they don\'t have water.
>> Students can drink beverages from the vending machine when they don\'t have their own water.
And Teachers can drink a coffee.
>> And teachers can drink coffee.
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