What\'s your thought on your school election? Do you think class presidents should be allowed to run

2024-08-26 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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I think my school election is equally because every students have a suffrage. And I think class presidents should be allowed to run for the second or third time is bad, because one people run for class leaders election several times is unfair. I think many students experience as leaders is good.

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                     What\'s your thought on your school election? Do you think class presidents should be allowed to run for the second or third time? Explain your answer.



I think my school election is equally because every students have a suffrage.
>> I think my school election is fair because every student has suffrage.

And I think class presidents should be allowed to run for the second or third time is bad,
because one people run for class leaders election several times is unfair.
>> And I think it\'s not good to allow class presidents to run for the second or third time because it\'s unfair for one person to be a class leader several times. 

I think many students experience as leaders is good.
>> I think it\'s good for many students to experience being leaders. 

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