What should someone do to be happy?
학생이 쓴 원문
To be happy for people, many needs have to be satisfied. There exist basic needs like clothes, house and food and high needs like social recognition. But regardless of these needs satisfaction, I think there is another thing to do to be happy. It is to go outside.
We don’t have to do something in outside. We can just walk around a park. It makes feel comfortable to go outside, breathe fresh air and look around.
I usually felt depression when I stayed in home long time because of covid-19. To cut a chain of depression and lethargy, I went outside and walked around the park for an 1 hour. As I had time to go outside, I could change my mood and depression disappeared. Based on my experience, people should make time to go outside to be happy.
강사 첨삭
Hi Se [이름], thank you for this. Have a great weekend!
Jasmin
To be happy for people, many needs have to be satisfied.
>>To be happy, many people needs a lot of things.
There exist basic needs like clothes, house and food and high needs like social recognition.
>>Like our fundamental necessity such as clothes, house, food, and social recognition.
But regardless of these needs satisfaction, I think there is another thing to do to be happy.
>>Aside from meeting these needs, there are other things that can make us happy.
It is to go outside.
>>It is to go out there and seize the day.
We don’t have to do something in outside.
>>We don\'t need to do a lot of things.
We can just walk around a park. It makes feel comfortable to go outside, breathe fresh air and look around.
>>We can just walk around the park, breathe some fresh air, and have some peaceful sightseeing that can make us feel relax.
I usually felt depression when I stayed in home long time because of covid-19.
>>Because of the pandemic, I feel depressed because I can\'t go outside and I need to stay at home most of the time.
To cut a chain of depression and lethargy, I went outside and walked around the park for an 1 hour.
>>I go outside and walk around the park so I can reduce my stress and anxiety.
As I had time to go outside, I could change my mood and depression disappeared.
>>I usually feel calm and less anxious when I am outside.
Based on my experience, people should make time to go outside to be happy.
>>Based on my experience, people should always have a sweet escape from reality.
>>To be happy, many people needs a lot of things.
There exist basic needs like clothes, house and food and high needs like social recognition.
>>Like our fundamental necessity such as clothes, house, food, and social recognition.
But regardless of these needs satisfaction, I think there is another thing to do to be happy.
>>Aside from meeting these needs, there are other things that can make us happy.
It is to go outside.
>>It is to go out there and seize the day.
We don’t have to do something in outside.
>>We don\'t need to do a lot of things.
We can just walk around a park. It makes feel comfortable to go outside, breathe fresh air and look around.
>>We can just walk around the park, breathe some fresh air, and have some peaceful sightseeing that can make us feel relax.
I usually felt depression when I stayed in home long time because of covid-19.
>>Because of the pandemic, I feel depressed because I can\'t go outside and I need to stay at home most of the time.
To cut a chain of depression and lethargy, I went outside and walked around the park for an 1 hour.
>>I go outside and walk around the park so I can reduce my stress and anxiety.
As I had time to go outside, I could change my mood and depression disappeared.
>>I usually feel calm and less anxious when I am outside.
Based on my experience, people should make time to go outside to be happy.
>>Based on my experience, people should always have a sweet escape from reality.
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