What should the government do to help those victims?
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Wow! Thank you so much for sharing your opinions about this topic.
I appreciate your ideas! High five for your sentences! I think they should all be responsible.
Anyway, we can talk more about this in class. I hope that you had a marvelous day.
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Teacher Nina
The gym located in the southern part of Korea collapsed last Friday presumably due to the weight of snow.
>> Correct!
>> OR: The gym collapsed last Friday was presumably due to the weight of the snow which is located at the southern part of Korea.
There were 565 freshmen from Busan University of Foreign Studies attending a welcoming event in the building when it collapsed.
>> There were 565 freshmen from Busan University of Foreign Studies were attending a welcoming event in the building when it collapsed.
>> OR: There were five hundred sixty five freshmen from Busan University of Foreign Studies were attending a welcoming event in the building when it collapsed.
The accident killed 10 students and 101 others sustained minor injuries.
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There have been a lot of controversies over who should take a responsibility for compensation.
>> There have been a lot of controversies over who should take the responsibility for the compensation.
The company that owns the resort should take the primary responsibility, followed by the school.
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Indeed the families of victims and Kolon Group, the owner of the resort, agreed on a compensation package today although the amount of the out-of-court settlement was not released.
>> Better: Indeed, the families of the victims and Kolon Group, the owner of the resort, agreed on a compensation package today although the amount of the out-of-court settlement was not released.
The government does not have a direct responsibility for compensation although it should have taken necessary measures to oversight the safety of the building.
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>> OR: The government does not have a direct responsibility for compensation although it should have taken precautionary measures to oversight the safety of the building.
The court ruling has been consistent not to compensate for personal injury that caused not due to negligence or carelessness on the part of the government agency.
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