What should we do to increase the awareness about environmental pollution
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What should we do to increase the awareness about environmental pollution?
There are no doubt the environmental pollution must be given a negative problems to people in the world. Nevertheless people think that some pollution have to bear for developing of industry for human better life. The some pollution gives serious diseases to wide animal, plant, and people. In addition, a lot of species have been become a endanger or already extinction around the world. The other pollution causes greenhouse effect that causes global warming in the world. The global warming is changing climate and changing climate causes danger problems. One of the main climate change problem is raising the sea level. These damage of environment do not help better human life. People should recognize about environmental pollution problems and try reducing it.
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What should we do to increase the awareness about environmental pollution?There are no doubt the environmental pollution must be given a negative problems to people in the world.
>> There is no doubt that environmental pollution give negative problems to people in the world.
Nevertheless people think that some pollution have to bear for developing of industry for human better life.
>> Nevertheless, peopl think that we have to bear the pollution to develop the industry for a better life.
The some pollution gives serious diseases to wide animal, plant, and people.
>> Some pollution give serious diseases to wild animals, plants and people.
In addition, a lot of species have been become a endanger or already extinction around the world.
>> In addition, a lot of species around the world became endangered or already extinct.
The other pollution causes greenhouse effect that causes global warming in the world.
>> Other pollution like greenhouse effect causes global warming in the world.
The global warming is changing climate and changing climate causes danger problems.
>> Global warmng causes the climate to change. Climate change causes dangerous problems.
One of the main climate change problem is raising the sea level.
>> One of the main climate change problems is raising of the sea level.
>> One of the main climate change problems is high tide.
These damage of environment do not help better human life.
>> These damages of the environment don\'t help humans to have a better life.
People should recognize about environmental pollution problems and try reducing it.
>> People should be aware of the environemental pollution problems and we should try to reduce it.
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