what should we do to increase the awareness about environmental pollution?
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When I was primary student, I saw the news article that said we should buy a bottle of water for drink. It was quite suprising to me, since many Korean had drunk tap-water in that time. But now, nobody think weird to buy a mineral water.
Not only the water, quality of air is also problem. My country use to be famous for clean air. People use to dry washed cloths in outside. But now, it is impossible. Many people take a mask for worrying the dust.
What makes our environment worse? There must be many reason such as industial causes, and life causes pollutant, but I think one important reason is lack of people\'s attention.
We can reduce garbage In our everyday life, and can request big companies to reduce the pollution by purchasing enviorment-frendly goods. we can use more transportation to reduce car made carbon dioxide. And also let goverment impose strick regulations to preserve the environment by voting for the right candidate.
I think most important is changing our mind itself
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When I was primary student, I saw the news article that said we should buy a bottle of water for drink.
>>>When I was a primary student, I saw a news article that said we should buy a bottle of water to drink.
It was quite suprising to me, since many Korean had drunk tap-water in that time.
>>> It was quite surprising to me since many Koreans had drunk tap-water that time.
But now, nobody think weird to buy a mineral water.
>>>But now, nobody thinks weird to buy a mineral water.
Not only the water, quality of air is also problem.
>>>Not only water, the quality of air is also a problem.
My country use to be famous for clean air.
>>>My country was used to be famous for clean air.
People use to dry washed cloths in outside.
>>>People used to dry washed clothes outside.
Many people take a mask for worrying the dust.
>>>Many people wear masks because they are worried about the dust.
There must be many reason such as industial causes, and life causes pollutant, but I think one important reason is lack of people\'s attention.
>>>>There must be many reasons such as, industrial causes and life causes pollutant, but I think one important reason is the lack of people\'s attention.
We can reduce garbage In our everyday life, and can request big companies to reduce the pollution by purchasing enviorment-frendly goods.
>>>We can reduce garbage in our everyday life and can request big companies to reduce the pollution by purchasing environment-friendly goods.
we can use more transportation to reduce car made carbon dioxide.
>>>We can use more public transportation to reduce carbon dioxide from cars.
And also let goverment impose strick regulations to preserve the environment by voting for the right candidate.
>>>Also, let government impose strict regulations to preserve the environment by voting for the right candidates.
I think most important is changing our mind itself
>>>I think the most important thing is changing our mindset itself.
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