What should you do if your phone used for banking is lost or stolen?
학생이 쓴 원문
We can see that someone’s phone is lost or stolen.
If my phone used for banking is lost or stolen,
First, Don’t be upset.
Second, I have to call the telecommunicaion service center for getting some advice, and then I can stop my phone using a banking.
Third, I also have to call on police for reporting a lost item.
Last, nevertheless If I can’t find my phone in longtime, I’ll request compensation for a losing phone to insurance company.
강사 첨삭
Hi Joey, you did an excellent job explaining the steps to take when a phone is lost or stolen. Your ideas are organized clearly, and your use of sequence words like “First,” “Second,” “Third,” and “Last” makes your writing easy to follow. I made a few small corrections to fix grammar and phrasing. For example, “telecommunicaion” should be “telecommunication,” and “call on police for reporting” should be “call the police to report.” I also adjusted “stop my phone using a banking” to “stop my phone from being used for banking,” which sounds more natural.
I really appreciate how much effort you put into giving a complete and detailed answer. You didn’t just write short sentences, you described each step carefully, which shows your logical thinking and strong effort. Keep up this excellent work!
~ T. Lia
We can see that someone’s phone is lost or stolen.
>> CORRECT
If my phone used for banking is lost or stolen,
>> CORRECT
First, Don’t be upset.
>> CORRECT or
>> First, don’t be upset.
Second, I have to call the telecommunicaion service center for getting some advice, and then I can stop my phone using a banking.
>> Second, I have to call the telecommunication service center for advice, and then I can stop my phone from being used for banking.
Third, I also have to call on police for reporting a lost item.
>> Third, I also have to call the police to report the lost item.
Last, nevertheless If I can’t find my phone in longtime, I’ll request compensation for a losing phone to insurance company.
>> Lastly, if I can’t find my phone for a long time, I’ll request compensation for the lost phone from the insurance company.
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