What shouldn’t one miss in California?
학생이 쓴 원문
The weacher in Califonia is very nice all year round, so I always feel good wherever I go.
In L.A, there are many beaches such as Venice Beach, Manhattan Beach, Santa Monica Beach.
The Beaches are beautiful and sunset is especially fantastic!
강사 첨삭
Hello, Jane!
I miss you in class today. Nevertheless, I am grateful for your homework submission.
California has 18. 4% of Asians and you can probably see them in all the beaches you have been. Since I have only seen Californian beach in the movies, I can say that they are fun and packed with people especially in summer.
I hope to visit these beaches someday. I think you have visited the best places and ate the most sumptuous food.
Take note of correct spelling, capitalization, and the use of \"the\" and \"and\" in connecting your ideas in your sentences. Overall, you did a wonderful job!
See you on Friday!
-T. Donna~
>> The weather in California is very nice all year round, so I always feel good wherever I go.
In L.A, there are many beaches such as Venice Beach, Manhattan Beach, Santa Monica Beach.
>> In L.A, there are many beaches such as the Venice Beach, Manhattan Beach, and Santa Monica Beach.
The Beaches are beautiful and sunset is especially fantastic!
>> The beaches are beautiful and the sunset is especially fantastic!
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