What snacks from other countries would you like to try?

2026-03-31 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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Five years ago, I visited China for business trip. That was a first time to visit China. China foods were so different from Korea foods. Some China foods have a so strong smell and taste. So i couldn\'t eat very well during my business trip. I was hungry everyday. But i didn\'t want to eat it. So i tried to find something to eat at the store. I bought some many snack and come to my room. China snack was not good and That was not my type. But among them, only one potato snack was really delicious. This snack name is lays. At first time, I thought this snack was from China. Because wrapping paper color was a gold. China love a gold color. But lays is also sold in Korea which I heard that recently. That have been sold in Korea for a long time. It\'s really tasty but we need to reduce our intake of salt for health. Salt influences our health.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Joon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. You really did well! :)
~ T. Camille

Five years ago, I visited China for business trip. 
>> Five years ago, I visited China for a business trip. 
That was a first time to visit China.
>> That was my first time to visit China.
China foods were so different from Korea foods. 
>> Chinese foods were so different from Korean foods.
Some China foods have a so strong smell and taste.
>> Some Chinese foods have really strong smell and taste.
So I couldn\'t eat very well during my business trip.
>> CORRECT!
I was hungry everyday. 
>> CORRECT!
But I didn\'t want to eat it. 
>> CORRECT!
So I tried to find something to eat at the store.
>> CORRECT!
I bought some many snack and come to my room. 
>> I bought various snacks and went back to my room. 
China snack was not good and That was not my type.
>> Chinese snacks were not that good and that was not my type.
But among them, only one potato snack was really delicious. 
>> CORRECT!
This snack name is Lays.
>> This snack\'s name is Lays.
At first time, I thought this snack was from China. 
>> CORRECT!
Because wrapping paper color was a gold. 
>> It\'s because the food wrapper\'s color is gold. 
China love a gold color.
>> Chinese people love the color gold.
But Lays is also sold in Korea which I heard that recently. 
>> CORRECT!
That have been sold in Korea for a long time.
>> That has been sold in Korea for a long time.
It\'s really tasty but we need to reduce our intake of salt for health. 
>> CORRECT!
Salt influences our health.
>> Salt has a bad impact on our health.

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