What social networking sites do you use? What kind of information are you comfortable releasing to t
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I am not the active user of any social network sites. But Linkdin and FB are used for a company related work.
The reason why I do not use them is that I am not convinced to share personal life to others. I understand that people want to show how much they enjoy their own life regardless of friends’ willingness to listen. It likes a singer who do not care of audiences. And an inconsiderate number of news from social sites is like unnecessary information.
Releasing any information about me to public is not comfortable at all. But sharing how I live to friends is OK.
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Hello [이름]!
I use Facebook to update myself from the life of my family and friends. It is commonly used in my country especially its chatting system.
But, I rarely post my life to others too. I frequently did it before, but I cut it these days. I realized that \' NOT ALL BEAUTIFUL THINGS ARE SHARED. \'
Anyway, here are the corrections.
I am not the active user of any social network sites. But Linkdin and FB are used for a company related work.
>>> Correct!
The reason why I do not use them is that I am not convinced to share personal life to others.
>>> Correct!
I understand that people want to show how much they enjoy their own life regardless of friends’ willingness to listen.
>>> Correct!
It likes a singer who do not care of audiences.
>>> It\'s like a singer who doesn\'t care of audiences.
And an inconsiderate number of news from social sites is like unnecessary information.
>>> Correct!
Releasing any information about me to public is not comfortable at all. But sharing how I live to friends is OK.>>> Releasing any information about me to the public is not comfortable at all. But sharing how I live to friends is OK.
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