What song would you like to sing for your parents and why?

2022-04-22 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I used to sing a children’s song well in front of my parent when I was a child. However, I barely sing for my parents these days. There are some reasons about that. First and foremost, I don’t like to sing in front of people. I think I have a lot of shy. Besides, I think I’m not good at singing songs as much as I can show it in front of people. Although I don’t like it, there is an exception. It is only my parent’s birthdays. When the date is coming up, I sing a birthday’s song together for them with a delicious cake that I prepare. I really hope that one day I will sing very well like famous singers.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! 

That\'s  so heartwarming! You are a very sweet daughter. Your parents are very lucky to have you. ^^ 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

I used to sing a children’s song well in front of my parent when I was a child.
>> I used to sing a children’s song well in front of my parents when I was a child.

However, I barely sing for my parents these days. 
>> CORRECT

There are some reasons about that.
>> CORRECT

First and foremost, I don’t like to sing in front of people. 
>> CORRECT

I think I have a lot of shy.
>> I think I am very shy. 

Besides, I think I’m not good at singing songs as much as I can show it in front of people.
>> CORRECT
>>OR: Besides, I think I’m not good at singing songs to the point that I can show it in front of people. 

Although I don’t like it, there is an exception. 
>> Even though I don\'t like singing, there is an exception and that is on either of my parent\'s birthday. 

It is only my parent’s birthdays.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

When the date is coming up, I sing a birthday’s song together for them with a delicious cake that I prepare.
>> When the date is coming up, I sing a birthday song to them with a delicious cake that I prepared. 

I really hope that one day I will sing very well like famous singers.
>> CORRECT

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