What special features do you think should be added to computers? Explain your answer.

2022-01-20 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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In my opinion, nowadays, there are too many unnecessary updates about the security. Instead, I think we have to make computer more comfortable to use and easier to learn. In computers, there are too many secret functions that we don\'t know yet. They are hard to find and even they are hard to use. Then, even though they are really useful functions, people don\'t use those functions. So we need to design or make the computers easier to find different kinds of functions. Also it is very helpful to learn how to program and how to use the functions. So I think we also have to make the computers easier to learn about them.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]:) 

Yes, a lot of people have troubles using computers especially the elderly people. It would be very beneficial if we make it easier for them to use. 

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In my opinion, nowadays, there are too many unnecessary updates about the security.
>> CORRECT

Instead, I think we have to make computer more comfortable to use and easier to learn.
>> Instead, I think we have to make computers more comfortable to use and easier to learn.

In computers, there are too many secret functions that we don\'t know yet.
>> CORRECT

They are hard to find and even they are hard to use.
>> They are hard to find and hard to use.

Then, even though they are really useful functions, people don\'t use those functions.
>> Even though they are really useful functions, people won\'t be able to use them because they don\'t know how to. 

So we need to design or make the computers easier to find different kinds of functions.
>> So we need to design or make  computers easier to handle the functions. 

Also it is very helpful to learn how to program and how to use the functions.
>> Also, it is very helpful to learn how to program and use these functions.

So I think we also have to make the computers easier to learn about them.
>> So I think, we have to make computers easier to use. 

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