What thing\'s in your home couldn\'t you live without?

2023-08-25 · 첨삭 강사 Faith

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I have to close the window when I sleep at night in summer. It is because of the noise of running cars and heavy drinkers. There seems to be nothing elese in particular. I live in an apartment complex in the middle of the city. It is very convenient to live there because there are fitness center, screen golf, mini library and small park in there. I can go to stopping mall, public offices, bus station, restaurant and cafe a few minutes away on foot. The building was built 15years ago but the facade looks new. The design was simple so it looks simple my apartment has 12floor of the 20 floor. There are tree rooms two bathrooms,kitchen in living room and two balcony in my home. The bath room are right side my children\'s between my couple room. My best place is a small library. It is my own space and I something read books, play harmonica and watch Youtube.

강사 첨삭

You were able to share enough details describing your house, Jullia. Hopefully, you become more familiar with them. Thank you so much!-Faith-
I have to close the window when I sleep at night in summer. It is because of the noise of running cars and heavy drinkers.
>> I have to close the window when I sleep at night in summer because of the noise of running cars and heavy drinkers.
There seems to be nothing elese in particular.
>> There seems to be nothing else in particular.
I live in an apartment complex in the middle of the city.
>> CORRECT
It is very convenient to live there because there are fitness center, screen golf, mini library, and small park there.
I can go to stopping mall, public offices, bus station, restaurant and cafe a few minutes away on foot.
>> I can go to stopping malls, public offices, bus stations, restaurants, and cafes a few minutes away on foot.
The building was built 15years ago but the facade looks new.
>> The building was built 15 years ago, but the facade looks new.
The design was simple so it looks simple my apartment has 12floor of the 20 floor.
>> The design is simple, so it looks plain, and my apartment is on the 12th floor of this 20-storey building.
There are tree rooms two bathrooms,kitchen in living room and two balcony in my home.
>> In addition, it has three rooms, two bathrooms, a kitchen, a living room, and two balconies.
The bath room are right side my children\'s between my couple room.
>> The bathroom is on the right side of my children\'s room or in between their bedroom and ours.
My best place is a small library.
>> The best place for me is the small library.
It is my own space and I something read books, play harmonica and watch Youtube.
>> It is my own space, and I can read books, play the harmonica, and watch on YouTube here.

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