What things do you want to add or remove in your house? Explain your answer.
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It is my personal opinion but I want to add a high specification computer in my room.
I think my computer is a great computer but it has a lot of limits because it is not that high specification.
If I buy a high specification computer, I can play a vedio game with no any disconnects.
So I want to add a high specification computer in my room.
And I think a lot of vases in my balcony is not neccessary for my house.
In my balcony, there are too many vases so I think it is very annoying to me.
I think just a few vases make my house\'s balcony more beautiful, but my parents buy more and more vases.
So I think removing some vases is very neccessary to my house for the harmony of my house.
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Hi [이름]! :)
I feel the same way too. I badly want to have a computer with great specs and I want to remove unnecessary things in my house was well. Thanks for sharing.
It is my personal opinion but I want to add a high specification computer in my room.
>> It is my personal opinion that I want to add a computer with high specification in my room.
I think my computer is a great computer but it has a lot of limits because it is not that high specification.
>>I think my computer is great but it has a lot of limitations because it it doesn\'t have that much high specs.
If I buy a high specification computer, I can play a vedio game with no any disconnects.
>> If I buy a computer with high specs, I can play a video game without getting disconnected.
So I want to add a high specification computer in my room.
>> That is why I want a computer with high specs.
And I think a lot of vases in my balcony is not neccessary for my house.
>> Another thing is that I think that there are a lot of unnecessary vases in my house.
In my balcony, there are too many vases so I think it is very annoying to me.
>> In my balcony, there are too many vases so I think it is very annoying.
I think just a few vases make my house\'s balcony more beautiful, but my parents buy more and more vases.
>> I think that having only a few would be more beautiful but my parents want to have more.
So I think removing some vases is very neccessary to my house for the harmony of my house
>> So I think removing some vases is necessary to make our house look more harmonious.
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