What three pieces of advice will you give your children
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What three pieces of advice will you give your children
I want to say my student of three pieces of advice.
first, you must be friendly your school mates, That is why friends in middle and high school days do together stand and fall through life.
therefore, you previously must give consideration your friend.
Second, I hope that you must read many books, it doesn′t
mean reading schhoolbook but books for culture and information,
you should read that′s like giving more wisdom than knowledge,
not searching for worthless information with your smart phone.
so then it will give a greater depth to your life.
Last, I wish you like exercises, if so, you should be helthy.
Our school established many convenient facilities, such as a soccer field in front and back yard.
healthy body is a foundation of your life.
you don′t forget above messages.
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Hi there, Mr. [Name]!^^
Happy Monday!
(^_^)
Wow! Your composition is very inspiring. It really moved me, I mean your concern for your students.
These advices will be a big help to them.
Thank you so much for this composition. I have read it well.
I have made some modification for you to teview later on.
See you tomorrow!^^
_T. Mayleen :)
I want to say my student of three pieces of advice.
>> I have three advices for my students.
first, you must be friendly your school mates, That is why friends in middle and high school days do together stand and fall through life. therefore, you previously must give consideration your friend.
>> First, you must be friendly to your schoolmates. Friends you\'ll meet during middle and high school could stay with you all your life through thick and thin. Therefore, you must be considerate to your friends.Second, I hope that you must read many books, it doesn′tmean reading schhoolbook but books for culture and information,you should read that′s like giving more wisdom than knowledge,not searching for worthless information with your smart phone.so then it will give a greater depth to your life.
>> Second, I hope you\'ll read manu books. Not only school books but also books about culture and general knowledge. Reading will give you wisdom and will give greater depth to your life. Don\'t just spend your time searching worthless information with your smartphones.Last, I wish you like exercises, if so, you should be helthy.
>> Last, you should stay healthy so exercise.Our school established many convenient facilities, such as a soccer field in front and back yard.
>> Our school established many convenient facilities such as soccer field.healthy body is a foundation of your life.you don′t forget above messages.
>> Having a healthy body is important in life. Keep in mind those advices.
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