What three things would you change if you were in charge of improving your school?

2023-12-19 · 첨삭 강사 Don

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If I were in charge of improving my school, most of all, I would make ‘A dodge ball competition’ every month because not to mention I love playing dodgeball and we could exercise running and jumping a lot regularly and it will make children grow up well and very healthy. Second of all, I would take great shefs to my school we could have more verious kinds of delicious food for lunch. It is because I think eating well and health are most important for children. Last of all, I would have the school yard enlarged because I feel like it is kind of small so I would like to make a football field, a tennis court and basketball court.

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T. DON

If I were in charge of improving my school, most of all, I would make ‘A dodge ball competition’ every month because not to mention I love playing dodgeball and we could exercise running and jumping a lot regularly and it will make children grow up well and very healthy. Second of all, I would take great shefs to my school we could have more verious kinds of delicious food for lunch. It is because I think eating well and health are most important for children. Last of all, I would have the school yard enlarged because I feel like it is kind of small so I would like to make a football field, a tennis court and basketball court.

>> If I were in charge of improving our school, I would put up ‘a dodge ball competition’ every month because not to mention that I love playing dodge ball, it is also a good exercise like running and jumping a lot regularly and it will make the children grow up well and healthy. Second of all, I would hire great chefs to my school we could have more various kinds of delicious food for lunch. It is because I think eating well and healthful food are most important for children. Lasty, I would have the school yard enlarged because I feel like it is kind of small so I would like to make a football field, a tennis court and basketball court for students to enjoy the playground.

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