What to do after retirement.
학생이 쓴 원문
I don,t know when my retirement wil be, but i want to design and build my own house after retirement.
Now i am designing highrise buildings,complex building and road and tunnel for others.
I surely want to build my own a little house even my own village to live.
I will enjoy happy life with our families and invite my friends there. I will invite you too.
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This is out of our topics. What i want to told this to you.
I am trying to get English grammer corrections and improve my English abillities through this short class.
Also i think i can learn not only this but also many things from you.
I hop you also feel a lot through this class.
I hope you to communicate with many people and understand Koreans and know Korean culture through
even this short class and future our essay (homework ㅜㅜ)
강사 첨삭
Hi Evan! :)
Retirement is what you make it. If you’re sitting and wondering what to do when retired and bored, it may be a relief to know that there are plenty of options out there and yours is actually a good suggestion. :)
PS: Yes, we can discuss a lot of things about the Korean culture. Actually, I have a lot of things to share as well. :) We can do that on our next discussion. Thanks for giving me these ideas.
PS: Thank you so much for considering to invite me to your house as well. :)
Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.
I don,t know when my retirement wil be, but i want to design and build my own house after retirement.
>> I don\'t know when I will retire but I want to design and build my own house when that comes.
Now i am designing highrise buildings,complex building and road and tunnel for others.
>> Now, I am designing high-rise buildings, complex buildings, roads and tunnel for others.
I surely want to build my own a little house even my own village to live.
>> I surely want to build my own little house even my own village to live in.
I will enjoy happy life with our families and invite my friends there.
>> I will enjoy a happy life with my family and invite my friends there.
I will invite you too.
>> CORRECT (Thank you so much! :) )
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This is out of our topics. What i want to told this to you.
>> This is our of our topic and I want to tell this to you.
I am trying to get English grammer corrections and improve my English abillities through this short class.
>> I am trying to get English grammar corrections and improve my English abilities through these short classes.
Also i think i can learn not only this but also many things from you.
>> Also I think I can learn not only this, but also many things from you.
I hop you also feel a lot through this class.
>> I hope you also feel the same way about this class.
I hope you to communicate with many people and understand Koreans and know Korean culture through even this short class and future our essay (homework ㅜㅜ)
>> I hope you communicate with many people and understand Koreans and know our culture even through these short classes and future essays.
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