What traditional values are not important or not necessary now?
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T. Jeny
>>Some of cultures have changed the last 10 years.
Among them, It is the most change to have a meal with family.
>>The biggest change is to have a meal with family.
In the past, most of parents teached thier childrens that when you have a meal, don`t talk with anyone.
>>In the past, most parents teach their children that when you are having a meal, don\'t talk with anyone.
But this culture was sharply changed.
>>correct
The reason why change is that We not enough to conversate one another excepting meal time.
>>The reason why they changed it because we don\'t have time to have a conversation except for having a meal.
because Both thier father and mother has a job, and their childerns spend time at the private education facilites.
>>Because both parents have a job, and their children spend time at the private education facilities.
SO, The meal time is very important for our life.
>>So, meal time is very important for our life.
During the meal, We possible to check thiers conditions and we ask for thier life.
>>During the meal, it\'s possible to check their condition and ask about their lives.
Thus Not unlike the past, Consultants and experts recommend people to use that time.
>>Unlike in the past, consultants and experts recommend people to use that time.
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