What traditional values are not important or not necessary now?

2017-05-17 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Some of cultures have been changed the latest 10 years. Among them, It is the most change to have a meal with family. In the past, most of parents teached thier childrens that when you have a meal, don`t talk with anyone. But this culture was sharply changed. The reason why change is that We not enough to conversate one another excepting meal time. because Both thier father and mother has a job, and their childerns spend time at the private education facilites. SO, The meal time is very important for our life. During the meal, We possible to check thiers conditions and we ask for thier life. Thus Not unlike the past, Consultants and experts recommend people to use that time.

강사 첨삭

Yes, JM!!!

You can speak the English well, you can make a good conservation, if you just push yourself to speak and improve your skills,

Just believe in yourself that you can.

Have a great day!!!

T. Jeny




Some of cultures have been changed the latest 10 years.

>>Some of cultures have changed the last 10 years.

Among them, It is the most change to have a meal with family. 

>>The biggest change is to have a meal with family. 
 In the past, most of parents teached thier childrens that when you have a meal, don`t talk with anyone. 

>>In the past, most parents teach their children that when you are having a meal, don\'t talk with anyone. 
 But this culture was sharply changed.

>>correct
The reason why change is that We not enough to conversate one another excepting meal time. 

>>The reason why they changed it because we don\'t have time to have a conversation except for having a meal.
 because Both thier father and mother has a job, and their childerns spend time at the private education facilites. 

>>Because both parents  have a job, and their children spend time at the private education facilities. 
 SO, The meal time is very important for our life.

>>So, meal time is very important for our life.

During the meal, We possible to check thiers conditions and we ask for thier life. 

>>During the meal, it\'s possible to check their condition and ask about their lives.
 Thus Not unlike the past, Consultants and experts recommend people to use that time.

>>Unlike in the past, consultants and experts recommend people to use that time.

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