What types of movies do you think should be banned for the public and why?
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I think movies that have too much violence in it must be banned.
First, Kids can I see the commercial and try to do things that they saw.
And it can traumatize people.
So I think it\'s good if we can see it on apps like Netflix. :-)
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What types of movies do you think should be banned for the public and why?
I think movies that have too much violence in it must be banned.
>>> CORRECT
First, Kids can I see the commercial and try to do things that they saw.
>>> First, kids can easily follow the things that they watch on commercials or on the television.
And it can traumatize people.
>>> Second, these violent movies can traumatize people.
So I think it\'s good if we can see it on apps like Netflix.
>>> So, I think it\'s better if we can only see these kinds of movies on apps like Netflix and that they will now allow underage to watch them.
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