What usually makes you feel tired?

2019-08-30 · 첨삭 강사 Kate

학생이 쓴 원문

I don`t feel well The heart is weak So I feel tired faster than other people. Doing house work, Meeting friends, Exerciseing etc... I feel very tired when I do many thing in a day also When I have a problem, I feel tired a lot. So I exercise hard everyday I walk in the park about twice a week and I do Pilates tree times a week Exercuse makes me healthy and less tired and makes me feel good.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!
I\'m sorry to hear that you don\'t feel well. I hope you get better soon. Thank you for the time and effort you put into writing your composition as well. You did really well. See you later in class! ^^
~~Teacher Kate
 
1. I don`t feel well.
>>CORRECT!
2. The heart is weak
>>My heart is weak. 
>>OR: I have a weak heart. 
3. So I feel tired faster than other people.
>>That is why I get tired faster than other people. 
4. Doing house work, Meeting friends, Exerciseing etc...
>>I easily get tired doing housework, meeting friends, exercising, etc. 
5. I feel very tired when I do many things in a day
>>CORRECT!
6. Also, When I have a problem, I feel tired a lot.
>>CORRECT!
7. So I exercise hard everyday
>>CORRECT!
8. I walk in the park about twice a week and
I do Pilates tree times a week
>>I walk in the park about twice a week and I do Pilates three times a week.
9. Exercuse makes me healthy and less tired and makes me feel good.
>>Exercise makes me healthy and feel less tired. It makes me feel good. 

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