What was my best travel experience and Why?
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What was my best travel experience and Why?
Every travel experience has a different meaning, so it could be chosen according to a current feeling and situation. Well while I am writing my essay, I just think of kids in my mind. It pushes me to pick up the travel experience with kids me.
The current and best experience is the glamping to Pine-velly in Pocheun with the three of us. There are reasons why I chose this.
Firstly, it was my first experience glamping with kids. At that time, I wonder if I could cook, play, and take care of kids for 2 days, but there were many kids with their own families. It was just like the playground in the residential community. So, that trip became a safe, enjoyable, and memorable one for me and the kids.
Secondly, I could see how my kids socialized with unknown friends. They turned out to be introverted within a group. So this trip thought me that I should be more patient and give time to get started something new.
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Thanks for this Sir [이름]! Experiences are definitely better when shared with people you care about.
Every travel experience has a different meaning, so it could be chosen according to a current feeling and situation.
>>> correct.
>>> OR: Every travel experience has a different meaning, so it could depend on the current feeling and situation.
Well while I am writing my essay, I just think of kids in my mind.
>>> OR: Well, while I am writing my essay, I just thought of the kids.
It pushes me to pick up the travel experience with kids me.
>>> It pushes me to pick the travel experience I had with the kids.
>>> It pushes me to pick the travel experience I had with the kids.
>>> OR: It gave me the drive to choose the travel experience with my kids.
The current and best experience is the glamping to Pine-valley in Pocheon with the three of us.
>>> correct
There are reasons why I chose this.
>>> correct
>>> correct
Firstly, it was my first experience glamping with kids.
>>> correct
At that time, I wonder if I could cook, play, and take care of kids for 2 days, but there were many kids with their own families.
>>> correct
It was just like the playground in the residential community.
>>> correct
So, that trip became a safe, enjoyable, and memorable one for me and the kids.
>>> correct
>>> correct
Secondly, I could see how my kids socialized with unknown friends.
>>> correct
They turned out to be introverted within a group.
>>> correct
So this trip thought me that I should be more patient and give time to get started something new.
>>> So this trip thought me that I should be more patient and give time to get them started with something new.
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