What was the best thing about your childhood?
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강사 첨삭
Hello JM !!!
Time is flying so fast like a blink of an eye. I just hope this week is going smoothly with you!
You\'ve done a great job! That\'s all that I can say with the performance you\'ve shown today! I have to say, each passing day that we\'re having classes there are some changes in you. It may not lead you right away to the perfection and mastery of the language but at least you\'re getting there step by step! Never give up and just keep yourself motivated!
Take care!!!
T. Jeny
The best thing is recieving a lot of toies from other contries.
>>The best thing is receiving a lot of toys from other countries.
My father frequently went to business trip at overseas.
>>My father frequently go for an overseas business trip.
so when the dates passed, I Check the something on the calender. rather than wating new toies, I hope to meet my father.
>>So I check the dates on the calendar, rather than waiting for new toys I hope to meet my father.
At that time my father gave me amazing present(toies) with \"how was last days?\",
>>At that time my father gave me amazing presents (toys).
Next day, I invited my freinds to play with them and to show that off.
>>The next day, I invite my friends to play with me and to show-off my toys.
Thank for my father, my friends want me to play with me at my home.
>>Thank for my father and my friends who want me to play with me at home.
so, it is very impressin during childhood.
>>So, it was very impressive during my childhood.
By this memories I want to be member of overseas sales department.
>>With this memories, I want to be member of the overseas sales department.
After passing the time,If I possible to give overseas product and explain the world.
>>After time passed by, if it is possible I will also do the same thing.
My son or daughter can postively affect thiers life.
>>My son or daughter can positively affect their lives.
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