What was the first big purchase you made as an adult?
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Before answering the question, I’d like to define being an adult in Korea. Various replies could be possible, however, I think marriage is one of the meaningful and important criteria for becoming an adult. So I’ll tell you about my first big purchase as an adult.
Months before my wedding, I spent hectic days preparing the place to live with my wife and the vehicle that we travel together on weekends with. With my savings and financial support from my parents and loans from a bank, I barely bought a small house and a small car before my wedding. It was my first time spending over 0.1 million dollars within a short period. But, I didn\'t feel the burden about it because the joy to kick off a new life with a loved one was more than anything else.
Anyway, I don\'t know if it\'s because of that, I have been able to invest in expensive properties without hesitation since then. I have been to make profits accordingly.
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Before answering the question, I’d like to define being an adult in Korea.
>> Before answering the question, I\'d like to define what is like being an adult in Korea.
I think marriage is one of the meaningful and important criteria for becoming an adult.
>> I think marriage is one of the meaningful and important criteria in becoming an adult.
I spent hectic days preparing the place to live with my wife and the vehicle that we travel together on weekends with.
>> I spent hectic days preparing the place to live with my wife and the vehicle that we will use to travel together during weekends.
It was my first time spending over 0.1 million dollars within a short period.
>> It was my first time spending over 1 million dollars within a short period of time.
I have been to make profits accordingly.
>> I have been able to make profits accordingly.
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