What was the last thing you did that made you feel so much better?

2021-12-22 · 첨삭 강사 Roanne

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There are many things that make me happy. But I have to choose only one, I would like to say beginning the exercise again. During last one year I studied very hard. Because I have to take a test to become a elementary school teacher. I almost studied fourteen hours in a day. Although I like to exercise, I didn\'t have any time. So My health was the worst last one year. My physical strength is getting worse and I was stressed out too. However, I begin to do flying yoga again one month ago. When I do flying yoga, I can think nothing and concentrate on only exercise. It is nice to reduce my stress. These days, I am doing flying yoga three times a week. I am happy and get more energy a day to yoga. I recommend exercising to people who are stressed out or getting worse. Because healthy body makes healthy mind. Especially. It is essential to maintain healthy body as a elementary school teacher. It\'s because teacher\'s health affects student\'s health. Therefore I will exercise now and for ever.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Sally!

Thank you for answering the question. 

Please check the corrections and suggestions below:

There are many things that make me happy. 
>> Correct! 
But I have to choose only one, I would like to say beginning the exercise again. 
>> Correct!  or But If have to choose only one, I would like to say beginning the exercise again. 
During last one year I studied very hard. Because I have to take a test to become a elementary school teacher. 
>> During the last school year I studied very hard because I have to take a test to become an elementary school teacher. 
I almost studied fourteen hours in a day. 
>> Correct! 
Although I like to exercise, I didn\'t have any time. 
>> Correct! or Although I like to exercise, I didn\'t have much free time. 
So My health was the worst last one year. 
>> So, my health was the worst last year. 
My physical strength is getting worse and I was stressed out too. 
>> Correct! 
However, I begin to do flying yoga again one month ago. 
>> Correct! or However, I begin to do flying yoga again a month ago. 
When I do flying yoga, I can think nothing and concentrate on only exercise. 
>> When I do flying yoga, I can\'t think of anything and concentrate only on exercising. 
It is nice to reduce my stress. 
>> Correct! 
These days, I am doing flying yoga three times a week. 
>> Correct! 
I am happy and get more energy a day to yoga. 
>> Correct! or I am happy and I get more energy a day to yoga. 
I recommend exercising to people who are stressed out or getting worse. 
>> Correct! 
Because healthy body makes healthy mind. 
>> Because a healthy body makes a healthy mind. 
Especially. It is essential to maintain healthy body as a elementary school teacher. 
>>Especially. It is essential to maintain a healthy body as an elementary school teacher. 
It\'s because teacher\'s health affects student\'s health. 
>> It\'s because the teacher\'s health affects student\'s health. 
Therefore I will exercise now and for ever.
>> Therefore, I will exercise now and forever.

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