What was the most challenging situation you have ever encountered? How did you deal with it? Discuss

2019-10-09 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

학생이 쓴 원문

There were retirement celebration 10 years ago. I was the member who performed the dance at the party. I haven\'t tried to do a dance ever, so I registered the dance institution. There were about 10 people who were attended in the dance school. I was the oldest guy and the worst one to do a dance. But I did my best and did the performance. Many people enjoyed our show and had a great time. It was really challenging for me to do a dance in front of many people and I realized that I didn\'t have talent of dance. My body was too stiff to do wave dance and I don\'t think that I have a sense of rhythm.

강사 첨삭

Hey, [이름]. I appreciate you sharing your most challenging experience. It was a joy to read. I bet that was a memorable experience for you. It seems you are a person who never backs down from a challenge. Great job and keep it up! ~ teacher Jane ^___^

There were retirement celebration 10 years ago. 
>>> There was a retirement celebration 10 years ago. 

I was the member who performed the dance at the party. 
>>> I was part of the group that performed the dance at the party. 

I haven\'t tried to do a dance ever, so I registered the dance institution. 
>>> I have never danced before so I registered to a dance institute. 

There were about 10 people who were attended in the dance school. 
>>> There were about 10 people who attended the dance school. 

I was the oldest guy and the worst one to do a dance. 
>>> I was the oldest guy and the worst one to dance. 

But I did my best and did the performance. 
>>> CORRECT =) 

Many people enjoyed our show and had a great time.
>>> CORRECT =) 

It was really challenging for me to do a dance in front of many people and I realized that I didn\'t have talent of dance.
>>> It was really challenging for me to do a dance in front of many people and I realized that I didn\'t have the talent to dance.

My body was too stiff to do wave dance and I don\'t think that I have a sense of rhythm.
>>> My body was too stiff to do a wave dance and I don\'t think that I have a sense of rhythm.

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