What was the most frightening experience you\'ve had?
학생이 쓴 원문
When Hyeon(my younger son) was 3 years old, We went to a big market to buy some food and daily necessaries.
While I was looking at things, he was looking at toys. Maybe after 2 or 3 minutes, he didn\'t look at toy section but I looked around.
I was so worried and afraid. I ran around and tried to find him. But I could not find him.
I went to the service center crying. I asked for a broadcast to find him.
After a while, Someone brought him crying. I was very happy.
But I can not forget at that time
강사 첨삭
Hello there [이름]! I was kind of teary eyed when I was reading your homework. You are good in conveying your feelings through writing that you even got me emotional. I cannot imagine when someone loses her baby in a big market. It\'s the fears of many mothers. Even if I\'m not a mother yet, I am kind of feeling the same feeling you had when you were in that situation. That\'s how good you are in telling a story through writing. Indeed, a mother\'s story is still the best. :)
I was so worried and afraid.
After a while, Someone brought him crying.
Until the next one! :)
~Teacher Sheila
When Hyeon(my younger son) was 3 years old, We went to a big market to buy some food and daily necessaries.
>>When Hyeon was 3 years old, we went to a big market to buy some food and daily necessities.
While I was looking at things, he was looking at toys.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I was looking at things while he was looking at some toys.
Maybe after 2 or 3 minutes, he didn\'t look at toy section but I looked around.
>>Maybe after 2 or 3 minutes, he was not at the toy section and I looked around.
I was so worried and afraid.
>> CORRECT
I ran around and tried to find him.
>>CORRECT
But I could not find him.
>>CORRECT
I went to the service center crying.
>>CORRECT
I asked for a broadcast to find him.
>>CORRECT
After a while, Someone brought him crying.
>>After a while, someone brought him crying.
I was very happy.
>>CORRECT
But I can not forget at that time.
>>But I cannot forget that time.
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