What was the most memorable vacation that you had with your family?
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When I was 14years old. My family went to the valley, I forgot that valley is where area. My family traveled From morning to evening, arrived at the valley in evening, my father set up a tent nexy together ate meat. I don’t forget the day mood. I feel so happy.
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What was the most memorable vacation that you had with your family?
When I was 14years old. My family went to the valley, I forgot that valley is where area.
>>> When I was 14 years old, my family went to a valley but I forgot where the valley is located.
My family traveled From morning to evening, arrived at the valley in evening, my father set up a tent nexy together ate meat.
>>> My family traveled from morning to evening, and we arrived at the valley in the evening. My father set up a tent and together we ate meat.
I don’t forget the day mood. I feel so happy.
>>> I will never forget the mood of that day. I felt so happy that day.
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